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OLIPOPThe homepage
What it's trying to do
The homepage has to do two jobs at once. It converts shelf recognition into a direct order, and it re-teaches a soda drinker that this soda is a fiber product. Most people meet OLIPOP in a cooler at Target, so the page isn't introducing anything. It's arguing that the can is worth buying twelve at a time from the people who make it.
What works
The collections grid sorts by fiber grams before flavor. 9g or 6g is the first choice the page asks you to make, ahead of Vintage Cola or Crisp Apple. For a soda brand that's an uncomfortable decision to have made, because it puts the spec in front of the craving. It's also the one thing on the page a competitor can't copy by Friday.
Three fixes
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the buy button has no price on it
Every card under "Shop our collections" ends in Add 12 Pack, and no number appears anywhere near it. The only product price on the homepage renders inside the cart drawer, so you have to open an empty cart to learn what a twelve-pack costs. Four sections down, the page shows a Target logo.
Someone who wants the number will go find it, and the nearest place to find it is a retailer. Put the price under each pack.
fewer exits at the exact moment somebody had already decided to buy.
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the H1 is empty
The page renders a blank H1. "The feel good soda" — the sentence carrying the whole position — is marked up as an H2 instead.
That's the tag search engines and assistants read as the page's subject, and OLIPOP's is empty. Ask an AI what OLIPOP is and it has to reconstruct the answer from body copy, when the answer was written years ago and is sitting right there in the hero. One tag change.
the sentence you already paid for starts counting.
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the page asks the same question twice
"Shop our collections" opens with 9g Fiber and 6g Fiber tabs. Two sections later, after "Why OLIPOP?", a block called "Shop by fiber line" asks the identical question again with side-by-side imagery.
The second ask implies the first one didn't land, and the page starts reading like two teams who didn't talk. It also spends the slot where "Available in stores" belongs. Walmart, Target and Whole Foods sit sixth on the page, below four rounds of merchandising, and they are the strongest trust asset on it.
Cut one. Keep the explainer, let the collections tabs lead with flavor, move the retailers up.
one fewer decision, and proof that arrives before the fourth ask.
What I'd make instead
The reformulation is the film nobody has made.
Getting to 9g of fiber in something people drink for pleasure has a taste cost, and somebody at OLIPOP sat in a room and rejected the versions that didn't clear it. Shoot that room. The panel, the batches that failed, the person who had to kill a flavor they liked.
It's the only proof that "real ingredients" is a practice and not a line, and no competitor can copy it, because they'd have to have actually done it.
If one of the three is useful, I'll send the rest of the read. If not, no hard feelings.
Jason Portillo
Boring Stories · boringstories.io